Talk:X (Kylie Minogue album)/GA1
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Reviewer: Hawkeye7 (talk) 19:59, 20 March 2011 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it reasonably well written?
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. References to sources:
- B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
- C. No original research:
- A. References to sources:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- B. Focused:
- A. Major aspects:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Pass or Fail:
Comments This article is going to take a bit of work to get up to GA standard, but since it is Kylie, the effort must be made.
- Lead:
- The lead has to be a summary of the article. The lead to this article is not. What it says is not in the article and vice-versa. The first sentence is great. Copy first two paragraphs down into the "Background" section, the stuff on the Brit Award and Grammy down to "Critical reception". Delete the "No official statement has been given on the sales of X, but", as this is belied by the "Chart performance" section. Consider putting some more of the material into the lead so it is a better summary of the article
- Background and writing:
- References required. Where did this come from?
- Development and recording:
- References required. Where did this come from?
- Release and promotion:
- recreated -> re-created (extra points: look up "recreation" in the dictionary)
- Delete "some of the biggest names in music, such as" which sounds like advertising copy
- "On 28 November 2007, Minogue announced she would promote X with a tour, to be called KylieX2008." Merge this into the next paragraph.
- "Perez Hilton, responded very positively to the track" Delete "very"
- Link Bloodshy & Avant
- "she had rarely appeared in the public eye in the region" -> "she had limited media exposure in the region"
- "Another fan of that song is American singer" is -> was to keep the article in the past tense
- "The song was commended for being overly modern and progressive," "Commended" is positive and "overly" is negative. I am unsure myself whether it is good or bad.
- Critical reception:
- Best section in the whole article! References! Consider splitting the two paragraphs in two to make it look more like the rest of the article visually.
- Singles
- References required. Where did this come from?
Have fun. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:45, 21 March 2011 (UTC)